This is an honest review and contains constructive criticism for the filmmakers, who I respect for their hard work. The only reason I finished this is because it was made in Pueblo, my home town.
There is some good stuff. The CG effects were really well done. Their uniforms were a nice touch, clearly military surplus but it made it feel realistic.
Unfortunately the acting was poor, and this was exasperated by the terrible dialogue. Compounding this problem again was the fact that the actors basically never felt like they were in the same room. The dialogue didn't feel natural or organic at any time. While something like "you certainly jest" (paraphrasing) might sound good in your head, it sounds robotic and inhuman out loud. That's just an example, most of the dialogue had the same unnatural feel when spoken.
Clearly these are amateur actors and filmmakers, but the filmmakers needed to make the actors job as easy as possible. Write the dialogue to sound as natural as you possibly can, and let the actors change up the lines till it sounds like real people. On project like this, shooting specific actors together can be hard because of people's schedules, but try to get your actors in the same room for a scene. Saying their lines to the other actors in the scene will help dialogue feel less robotic and emotionless.
Another note, I was confused as to whether the ship was supposed to be military or bounty hunters. They have military ranks and say something about UN orders, but the Captian is just a rich guy and they're going after a bounty for a ship. If this was explained it missed it, the show didn't really hold my attention, but this should be made clear in the first little episode.
There were some smart decisions made as well. Giving the ship a submarine feel made it easy to limit characters in a scene and helped the CG environments feel more realistic. I also want to give a special shout-out to the guy who played Abner. He was definitely the best actor and did a decent job with some of his lines, even if they weren't written better then the others lines.
If they make another show I'll probably check it out. Hopefully they will learn some lessons from this project and improve on those aspects next time. Making a show on the cheap is quite the task and it's a brave thing to do. Please just take this as constructive criticism, the writing (dialogue, characters, and story) need lots of work. Next time spend more time hammering out this aspect of your project.
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