If you enjoy watching post apocalyptic shorts like I do , then you should definitely watch this! was it boring? no it gets to the point right away. Did exceed expectations? Kind of but was worth it.
Now here is my criticism for this short.
Let's start with the Foley.
-Footsteps were not in sync in the scene were Crimson was walking back towards the woman in distress. -The breathing is annoying. Take it down a notch next time. -The blood splatter when a marauder is kicked into a bear trap sounds rubbish and cartoonish. -The punches and kicks were actually good for a short. -When Crimson fired her guns , it sounded awkward. Try doing some research on what sound do different guns make. -The thunder crash sounded like someone grabbing a bag of chips far away. -The wolves or animals sound towards the end sounded to generic.
Now let's dive into the story.
According the plot you have written, "A post-apocalyptic western, this short vignette follows the outlaw known only as Crimson Blade as he fights for survival in a desolate future." (Spoiler for whoever sees it, Crimson is a she.) the reveal in the description leads to a false reveal. Should've left it as "Mysterious Outlaw". -According to the short it's, "Crimson Blade, a mysterious outlaw who is wanted in the desolate western future encounters a woman in distress in they're short path." -I believed it was going to be about an outlaw fighting what was going to be a threat to others and themselves, instead it was about marauder's trying to ambush our main character on they're path to wherever they are going. It wasn't bad but just misleading. -When Crimson is grunting, it already gave away the "He" was a "She". pretty much it killed the big reveal.
Dialogue & Acting.
-Acting was actually decent and not quite bad as other shorts. -there was some useless lines such as "You're good as they say, but i've killed better." felt chessy. "I thought I smelled bitch" line sounded like out of a bad comedy.
and finally cinematography.
-It was decent. needs better camera work. -There was too many close ups, try using over the shoulder shots for dialogue scenes and wide shots for actions scenes.
at the end of all this, there needs to be more story. I love the name Crimson Blade but I barely got to know her. I recommend watching some Film Riot and Corridor Digital content on you-tube to better understand character development and world building. I would like to see a part two that talks about on how the world got that way and who is Crimson Blade and what is their purpose in the story.
Let's start with the Foley.
-Footsteps were not in sync in the scene were Crimson was walking back towards the woman in distress. -The breathing is annoying. Take it down a notch next time. -The blood splatter when a marauder is kicked into a bear trap sounds rubbish and cartoonish. -The punches and kicks were actually good for a short. -When Crimson fired her guns , it sounded awkward. Try doing some research on what sound do different guns make. -The thunder crash sounded like someone grabbing a bag of chips far away. -The wolves or animals sound towards the end sounded to generic.
Now let's dive into the story.
According the plot you have written, "A post-apocalyptic western, this short vignette follows the outlaw known only as Crimson Blade as he fights for survival in a desolate future." (Spoiler for whoever sees it, Crimson is a she.) the reveal in the description leads to a false reveal. Should've left it as "Mysterious Outlaw". -According to the short it's, "Crimson Blade, a mysterious outlaw who is wanted in the desolate western future encounters a woman in distress in they're short path." -I believed it was going to be about an outlaw fighting what was going to be a threat to others and themselves, instead it was about marauder's trying to ambush our main character on they're path to wherever they are going. It wasn't bad but just misleading. -When Crimson is grunting, it already gave away the "He" was a "She". pretty much it killed the big reveal.
- And Crimson letting that one marauder go defeats the purpose of killing that woman who threatened to blackmail her with her "Secret", the boy knows too. He should be dead as well.
Dialogue & Acting.
-Acting was actually decent and not quite bad as other shorts. -there was some useless lines such as "You're good as they say, but i've killed better." felt chessy. "I thought I smelled bitch" line sounded like out of a bad comedy.
- The woman just screamed for no reason towards the end as Crimson got back up.
and finally cinematography.
-It was decent. needs better camera work. -There was too many close ups, try using over the shoulder shots for dialogue scenes and wide shots for actions scenes.
- I love the opening shot where it tells you what world we are in and reveals who our main character is with that wanted poster.
at the end of all this, there needs to be more story. I love the name Crimson Blade but I barely got to know her. I recommend watching some Film Riot and Corridor Digital content on you-tube to better understand character development and world building. I would like to see a part two that talks about on how the world got that way and who is Crimson Blade and what is their purpose in the story.
